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  1. #21
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    Thanks a lot Kikiz! Next chapter on Monday!

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    Cool Chapter 2 "Ganko and Tsurara, the great journey begins!"

    Ok people, as promised I post chpt 2:

    Next morning: In a small room Ikoude sleeps in her bed, the clock says 5:59
    An old man opens the door
    Old: IKOUDE!!! IT'S TIME!
    Ikoude: Hey, what's on?
    Old: It's 6:00 o'clock, it's time for you to leave..
    Ikoude: Ayay... Ok grandpa I'm comin...
    5 minutes later in the hall
    Old: You've became a splendid young lady from the day when I was asked to raise you....I'll miss you so much..
    Ikoude: Don't worry grandpa I'll write you every week, I love you.
    Ikoude runs out of her house.
    Old: Come back! You forgot your meal..too late..I hope she won't be starving.
    Ikoude meets Yoru by the way
    Ikoude: Hi swee..
    Yoru looks at her angrily
    Ikoude: Yoru! I'm so excited. Who knows what will our new comrades be like..
    Yoru: Probably a couple of dumbs..
    Batake is waiting at the gate of the village.
    Batake: Oh, here you are.. I was waiting for you since half an hour.
    Ikoude: We were supposed to meet at 6:00!
    Batake: A true samurai must do the things for good, you know.
    Yoru: Anyway where are the others?
    At this moment a blaze of fire comes towards them..
    And a red haired boy stood among the flames which disappeard quickly.
    Batake:* This must be....the land of volcanoes...*
    ???: Hi dudes, I'm Ganko, Ganko Honotsu from Kazan no tochi*Man, I'm so tired. We walked all the night to come here..
    Batake: As I thought..
    Ikoude:Hi I'm Ikoude Shizen
    yoru: Yoru no Tsubasa....
    Another guy arrives.
    ??: Ganko, do you always have to exhibit yourself??
    Ganko: Calm down Tsurara, I'm only introducing myself. Anyway, this is Tsurara Sekihen from Hyouga no tochi.
    Tsurara: I can introduce myself!!!!!
    Ganko: Too late dude..
    Tsurara:sigh....
    Batake: All ready? Ok, here we go!
    They leave. Now they walk in a path trought the forest.
    Ikoude: Hey Yasai?
    Batake: Listen Ikoude, since I'm your leader you should call me sempai or sensei, got it?
    Ikoude: Yes sensei! Listen, I have a question.. why do we have to become samurai?
    Batake: Interesting question Ikoude... Let's see...A long time ago this land was rich and paceful, but as you well know after the tragedy from 12 years before we've been robbed and destroyed. Our land isn't as powerful as one time.. so we need samurais who accept a Daimyo's leadership and do his bidding and in return they pay us. But we don't have enough samurais, so we need you to become them. Ronins are not paid.
    Yoru: But Ganko and Tsurara aren't from our land, if they become samurai they'll benefit only their lands.
    Batake: Right, but we're their allies so we do them this little favour. They needed a skilled sensei but they haven't any...
    Ikoude: I'm starving...When will we stop and eat something?
    Batake: As soon as we arrive to my house in the country. It will occur half a day.
    All: ...
    Ikoude: Yoru... will you give me a cracker?
    Yoru: Forget it...
    Ganko: Hey dude, she's hungry and you have food. I don't see why can't you give her one cracker!
    Yoru: Cuz you're dumb.
    Tsurara: Hey, what's up !?!
    They start struggling. Soon a small knife flies trought the air and separates them.
    Batake: You kids won't be struggling here. Try to behave as a team. Help and trust are the more important thing for a team.
    ikoude: Help and trust?
    Batake: Yes, that's as my sensei used to say. He was a graet man and an unbeateble warrior...I never met someone like him again.
    Ganko: He was?
    Batake: Yes, unfortunately he's already dead. So Yoru, how will it be?
    Yoru gives ikoude a cracker*hmph*
    They walk for half a day and finally arrive at 4:00 PM
    A huge house stands in front of them, a house with 20 floors.
    Ikoude: Is that your house sensei Batake?
    Batake: No, this is a public hotel, mine is there.
    And points a pagoda near to the forest.
    All:..............
    Batake: Ok guys here we are!
    Ganko: Food!!! I'm hungry as a wolf!
    Batake: You won't be eating for now. Before we eat you must do something.....it's to prove you're a true ronin.
    Tsurara: Prove? We're already ronins...
    Batake: No, you aren't but you'll soon be. I prepared a test for you, the final test for today....END Next time: "Hurry up, I will be ronin"

    *Kazan no tochi= Land of volcanoes
    Hyouga no tochi= land of glaciers
    Daimyo= feudal lords.
    Last edited by Yoru; 03-18-2008 at 03:16 PM.

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    Interesting but the introduction of Ganko and Tsurara could be better but maybe if I read more chapters I wouldn't complain because this introduction may fit their personalities. I also think that you should give some pictures, too.



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    I like reading more

    Batake: You kids won't be struggling here. Try to behave as a team. Help and trust are the most important thing for a team.

    it seems to me famouly ....you should introduce a person like jiraiya...and yes i would like to see some pictures to

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    I'll be waiting, be sure. Yoru's Avatar
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    you should introduce a person like jiraiya
    You mean a perv?
    Last edited by Yoru; 03-19-2008 at 08:49 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Yoru View Post
    You mean a perv?
    hm yeah

    1.he should be one of the strongest
    2.funny ( or perv or something)
    3.he should be old


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    You got it dude. I already tought of one many months ago, but he'll appear late. Ehm....very late(sorry) He's tall 140cm, he's old like 70-75 and a true passion for visiting hotsprings in summer. I can't say more but you surprisingly centred my character in all 3 points.

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    can you make the villian the hero?..s

    A common mistake that people make when trying to design something completely foolproof is to underestimate the ingenuity of complete fools.

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    The villian? No dude.sorry but I don't like villians. Ikoude is a perfect heroine, i think....

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    revealing of the 3.chapter ? hmhm i hate waiting

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